Dovahkiin

Ah, you could have stated that from the start. A temporary approval is fine so the event can start. However, the non contact between staff is the only thing killin us right now. We all need to get on the same page. We will continue the clan after the event.

Agreed. I wouldn't mind fixing things here and there during the event though, so feel free to keep this moving throughout the plot.

"Feel free to keep this moving throughout the plot." was supposed to be the hint.. to keep moving. Next issue? You said something about the eyes?

Strun Bah - From 0-10 ft. how long does the paralysis last?

Fus Ro Dah - Same issue here is with size. The concept is ok, but at B Rank the size is too grand. At c rank, this jutsu is only five ft., so only giving 10 more chakra, yet the size more than quadruples, that is the issue. Edit your numbers in your post, so I can see, so I don't have to back track to page one.

As far as the eyes, the lock on is a trait of my clan directly, and I don't want it duplicated. So that is why the lock on is denied.

Alrighty, edits have been made. I'll explain.

1) I lopped the radii (<--good word) of the jutsu from here on out in half. Now I know lopping each one off by a whopping 50% is kind of subtly drastic, but 30 feet was pretty massive, and I'm in a hurry to get this finished. So, all the B rank, and the A rank, were cropped down to scale.

2) I played with the wording on the eyes there. I wanted to keep the reaction boost, so that's staying, it's just caused by something OTHER than the actual "locking on" thing now.

Next?

We talked about this on the phone, and I did the edits. I believe we're finally done!