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Kataro Fuma
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PostSubject: Muramasa    Sat Oct 27, 2012 2:12 pm



Name:Muramasa
Type: muramasa has sweet spot near the middle of the blade . The blade is a traditional samurai blade that was once weilded by kataro's great great great grandfather.
Quantity: one
Description: Muramasa is a five inch long blade with a sweet spot in the middle of the blade
Abilities: muramasa was considered a demonic blade yet the only thng it truely offered was enhanced speed by 55% and power by 45% these ablitites have the potentional to grow but only if the wielder commits himself to upholding the family tradition of only using one blade at a time For muramasa's speed and power in order to fully use the power of muramasa the weilder must pour aleast 50 % of their chakra.
Durability: pure steel
History: Muramasa and masamune were two swords passed down through kataro's family since his great great great grandfather the blades were forged by the greatest blacksmiths in the land of red sands masamune and his apprentice muramasa the bladeswhere crafted to help protect The fuma's on their jounry to the land of southeren frost muramasa and masamune were considered the one of the most dangerous twin swords due to the secret technique pasted down through the fuma family line if a single move is done wrong the weilder could lose a limb .
Appearance:muramasa has a purple hilt with a amythist bead attached to the end and has a five inch long blade

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PostSubject: Re: Muramasa    Sat Oct 27, 2012 3:25 pm

Alright first the coding problems need fixed, type the words after the brackets not in them. Second, sacred isn't a viable answer for quantity, quantity mean how many there are. Third, puncuation needs to be used in the description, I can barely make out what it means since its one huge run on sentence. And lastly, sword is not specific enough for the type, there are many different kinds of sword and you have to specify which, do this and I'll continue.

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PostSubject: Re: Muramasa    Sat Oct 27, 2012 7:26 pm

One more thing, 'muramasa' is not an ability

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PostSubject: Re: Muramasa    Sat Oct 27, 2012 7:30 pm

working on it :/

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PostSubject: Re: Muramasa    Sat Oct 27, 2012 11:17 pm

Quantity = the number of the item you are purchasing.

Iron tempered steel is not a number.

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PostSubject: Re: Muramasa    Sun Oct 28, 2012 12:29 am

My guess is that there is grammatical confusion here between quantity and quality, an honest mistake I guess but yes it needs fixing

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PostSubject: Re: Muramasa    Sun Oct 28, 2012 2:00 am

thanks takeshi and yes it did look like quality

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PostSubject: Re: Muramasa    Sat Nov 03, 2012 1:15 am

muramasa and masamune ready to slice and dice the enemy >

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PostSubject: Re: Muramasa    Sat Nov 03, 2012 1:34 am

Sense we both on I'm hoppin' in this ish

1)
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There's more then one blade? I'm hearing twin blades which is 2 which means the quantity is 2 not 1.

2) Abilites
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How much are the skills being advanced/ enhanced give me some numbers here.

3)
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The Durability you have isn't a Durability at all, Durability is the strength of the blade itself and what it can withstand catch my drift?

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PostSubject: Re: Muramasa    Sat Nov 03, 2012 1:46 am

EDITED AND FIXED :O

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PostSubject: Re: Muramasa    Sat Nov 03, 2012 1:51 am

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Alright now the abilities, It'll have to cost chakra to activate the abilities and also you can only have one sword boost active at a time you got me?

Which means if you use Muramasa's Enhanced Speed and Strength ability then you can't use Masamune's Abilites and vice versa <- Be sure to add this in your own words.

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PostSubject: Re: Muramasa    Sat Nov 03, 2012 2:03 am

READY

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PostSubject: Re: Muramasa    Sat Nov 03, 2012 5:19 am

Nami can keep on this but I have thing to say that I decided to wait on since I was told to try and be more nice to people here rather than saying things bluntly. This is 2 independent weapons, thus you are required to fill out two different equipment applications. Putting 2 things in one is only alright if they are the exact same which does not seem the case here.

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PostSubject: Re: Muramasa    Sun Nov 04, 2012 9:11 pm

FIXED :/ now to work hard on crafting a fresh weapon app.

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PostSubject: Re: Muramasa    Tue Nov 06, 2012 9:26 am

Expanding on what Nami said about using one blade's power at a time, this requires you to edit that same thing in the new app of Masamune. It seems to me that your working on Masamune first (It is higher on the more recent posts list) before coming back to this one which is fine. I will be reading that one as well after I finish here.

To add on, Saying that you have to use 20% of your chakra to activate this skill will make the chakra number go up as you rank up. Therefore it needs to be a set number of chakra. It will also have to have a duration and cooldown. If not, your gonna end up paying a fortune for it. Everything I said here will also apply to Masamune. If you read this, be prepared for these edits in that weapon as well.

For type, it is either a Katana or short sword, depending on its shape. Some video games offer what is called a Dirk or Rapier. You may have your pick at these names, but type is basically a one to two word answer.

Not totally sure what you mean by sweet spot, but I'll relate it to baseball. Hitters have sweet spots on their bats to make great contact with a baseball. Hitting this sweet spot usually leads to homeruns of extra bases for the hitter. So are you saying the blade has an area that is sharper than the rest of the blade? If so, state where that is. Depending on where will surely affect price. Do not edit it in the app yet, just answer the question. We will further expand on this once I get your answer.

Do you have an image for the weapon? We usually want one, so try and find one. If not, your description needs to be a little better. It's far too short.

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PostSubject: Re: Muramasa    Thu Nov 08, 2012 1:58 am

I explained the sweet spot on masamune and a side paragraph on the katana :/

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