Lol, I love how you put your warning of the pet shop. Hilarious. Now, even though Nami is going through the entire clan, I still want to point out, even though you added the pet shop rules, you didn't change the wording in stage two of the kekkei genkai. It still speaks of summoning and blood contracts. You can keep the blood contract as a taboo ritual type deal, but they can't be summons. The pet is either always with you, or has to be in the topic with you in order to fight alongside.
Ex: It can't mysteriously appear after not mentioning it for 5 posts in a topic.
Change the Stage 2 wording please, or you will be stoned, and I'm talkin baked..
Subject: Re: Yukiyami Clan Sat Sep 08, 2012 4:00 pm
Hidden Blizzard - I'm not a fan of how it exactly replicates the hidden mist. With it being a blizzard, maybe add the temperature it has to be, and also how fast the snow falls. If its depending on ow the user wants it, expand on the variations.
Ice Shuriken - For a D Rank technique, 60 mph is excessive. Also, 19 yards isn't a long distance. Kids can throw shuriken 19 yards easy. I'll allow some expansion on that.
Ice Style: Body Flicker - There really isn't a difference here between this one and the real body flicker. If you choose to use this one, it needs to involve actual ice. If it does get approved, you won't be able to purchase the original body flicker.
Subject: Re: Yukiyami Clan Sun Sep 16, 2012 1:52 pm
Okay.. Edit Bump again, but yet again I'm having issues with stuff. I don't know what to do for measurements on the blades... I've never done this before, and I am quite sorry if I seem kinda pathetic for asking for so much help.
I should have been more prepared... *facedesk*
So, can you throw a chart my way or something. I'd appreciate it.
Subject: Re: Yukiyami Clan Sun Sep 16, 2012 2:12 pm
For stage one of ice blade just make it to where the blade extends 1 1/2 ft. from the end of your hand. Metal isn't specific. Just say steel durability.
Ice explosion - We are gonna come back to this one later.
Ice Blade Stage 2 - The blade sharpens almost three times more. So no. It's only one rank higher, so the power should only increase 20%. Metal is too vague, just say reinforced steel. What type of metal. Increase length from the C rank blade by 20% for this jutsu as well.
New Moons Grasp Stage 2 - This is a Genjutsu, not a ninjutsu. If you trap someone within an illusion, you cannot inflict damage while they are in it. That's too OP. However, you can say that the freezing temperatures can cause exhaustion once the genjutsu breaks. It needs a duration and a cooldown.
Subject: Re: Yukiyami Clan Tue Oct 09, 2012 12:59 pm
Actually, on to the S Rank first. The wording of this is very similar to the snake mouth jutsu. Which is fine, however, do you have to be on a mountain for this since you reference avalanche? This is for technicality only. Second, is the damage exactly the same numbers as used in the Snake's Mouth Jutsu? Last, the snake wraps the enemy. This jutsu doesn't. So virtually inescapable can't apply for it. Remove it. This is a singular direction jutsu.
Subject: Re: Yukiyami Clan Tue Oct 09, 2012 8:51 pm
I would change the dimensions of the leopard if I were you. The length and width are proportionate to that of a snake. You need to find the proportions that would match an oversized leopard. Length width and Height. Do that and you should be done with this one and we can get to the Ice Explosion technique
Subject: Re: Yukiyami Clan Fri Oct 12, 2012 10:14 pm
Ok, now the explosion clone. Normal exploding clones cause burns or knock the enemy back. However, yours is trying to inflict cutting damage and deep at that. If it explodes, it can only cause freezer burning or some level of temporary frost bite. Cutting into someone without the chance of dodging is OP.