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Takeshi
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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Mon Apr 02, 2012 5:26 am

The degree of each stage isnt all that bad in my opinion, however I need to ask if the power, speed and reaction boosts stack with each other

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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Mon Apr 02, 2012 8:43 am

I'm not going to be able to let you have passive increase in your lightning and wind by 20%. That has to be done through an item that will cost you a fortune. Plus it can either only be limited to clan jutsu or one elemental jutsu, not two. Your already getting a decent amount of stat boosts from what I can see.

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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Mon Apr 02, 2012 4:04 pm

No, wind isn't boosted. The user takes on damage from wind at higher power. I can reword it to this if you'd like:

The user is 20% less resistant to fuuton jutsu.

OR I can just get rid of the whole concept if you would rather me not touch those areas at all.

Either way, you pick.
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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Mon Apr 02, 2012 4:06 pm

And Takeshi, they do stack. (Otherwise.. there would really be no difference from the last stage and the first other than hair color. Does that make sense?)
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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Mon Apr 02, 2012 4:45 pm

I'll start by saying that if you aren't gonna be less susceptible to fuuton if lightning is your affinity. Lightning is weak vs. Wind, not stronger. If anything, you would be 20% less effected by earth. On that note, its just best that you take it out completely.

No if your stats stack, its easier just to give the increased number of your stat boost in the next stage. Do so now to clear up the confusion.

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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Mon Apr 02, 2012 6:49 pm

Of course, I'm sorry I didn't catch that.

Fixed and bumped.
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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Mon Apr 02, 2012 7:45 pm

Onto the jutsu.

First off, it should say, 'Charge time equivalent to handseals at this rank'

Thunder Style: Charge - 20% increase for 10% at D Rank is too much. 5% at the most, or 10% if you reduce the duration to 6 posts. Cooldown needs to be higher than the duration.

Thunder Style: Thunder Punch - Give the dimensions of the affected area. Call them 1st degree electrical burns. Numb for the first post, second post, the enemy regains 70% feeling back. Cooldown needs to be 5.

Thunder Style: Cell Acceleration - this needs to be C-A Rank if you keep it as it is. No way a D Rank is gonna be able to heal a 3 inch deep wound. If you keep it C-A, you'll have to give up one of each technique that you already have at their respective ranks. You give the depth of the wound but not the overall size.

This covers all the D Ranks. Make your adjustments then bump.

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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Mon Apr 02, 2012 7:54 pm

There you are; bump.
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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Mon Apr 02, 2012 8:24 pm

Thunder Punch - It still doesn't say what its supposed to.

1st post - Completely numb area

2nd post - 70% feeling returns

3rd post - All feeling returns to hit area.

Cell Acceleration - At D Rank, its only going to be able to cover minor wounds only. Maybe if it were C Rank the medium would come into play.

Make that set of edits then bump

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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Mon Apr 02, 2012 8:29 pm

Oops, I apologize for misunderstanding you. Bump, edits were made.
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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Mon Apr 02, 2012 9:05 pm

Thunder Punch - Cooldown needs to be 5.

Cell Acceleration - Last edit. It can only heal the part your holding (not the entire wound if it stretches beyond your hand) for that single post of holding. Cooldown needs to be 4.

Once that is done, onto the C Ranks we will go.

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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Mon Apr 02, 2012 9:18 pm

Alrighty, last edits were made. Shall we keep moving?
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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Mon Apr 02, 2012 9:31 pm

Lightning Aura Minor - Lasts too long. Maybe 4 posts at C Rank. C Rank Jutsu cannot paralyze an entire limb. Maybe up to the elbow or knee. If your coating your whole body in this, even at C Rank, you need a drawback because this is basically an auto hit. One drawback would be you could not perform offensive maneuvers while it is in effect. You may want to rethink it completely, but this is your option for now. Not jutsu for this rank, 'charge equivalent to handseals at users rank' (You may want to correct that all the way through your app while your ahead. I dont wanna keep sayin this)

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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Mon Apr 02, 2012 10:03 pm

Alright, think i got everything. I also changed the charging details for the rest of them to save you hassle.
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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Thu Apr 05, 2012 7:17 pm

  • Thunder Style: Charge
    Looks fine to me, approved

  • Thunder Style: Thunderpunch
    Again it looks fine for a D rank, approved

  • Thunder Style: Cell Acceleration Minor
    Well there is another one similar to this in concept so yea s'all good. Approved.

  • Thunder Style: Lightning Aura Minor
    hmm, alright well just reword part of it to say no offensive jutsu rather than no jutsu that can damage the opponent


Lets start here and we can do more

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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Thu Apr 05, 2012 7:49 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Thu Apr 05, 2012 8:53 pm

  • Thunder Style: Sonic Boom
    Lets drop this to a 20% increase but otherwise is fine by me

  • Thunder Style: Gatling Lightning
    Fine by me, approved

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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Thu Apr 05, 2012 9:05 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Thu Apr 05, 2012 9:46 pm

  • Thunder Style: Restless Lightning
    Looks fair enough for a B rank, approved

  • Thunder Style: Fokuhai
    What is the penetration power of this beam? Say someone is wearing armor or something or blocks it with a weapon, what will it go through anyway?

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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Thu Apr 05, 2012 10:01 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Stormblood Clan   Fri Apr 13, 2012 12:20 am

  • Thunder Style: Fokuhai
    B rank power looks fine to me since clan techs of a basic element tend to be slightly stronger anyway. Approved.

  • Thunder Style: Lightning Aura Major
    By no offensive does that mean the user cant use any kind of attack jutsu or something? Or that they cant go on the offense at all?

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